Natural disasters happen almost every day，those devastating ones leave us to think about our behaviors towards nature again.

　　First of all，we need to set a sound pre-warning mechanism, which enables us to detect potential risks at an early stages. Accordingly，emergency measures can be taken，and losses can be minimized.

　　Second，governments have to equipped with an excellent Disaster Assistance Response Team to rescue those disaster-stricken areas. The primary goal is to provide emergency services, such as drinking water and medical treatment, until long-term aid arrives.

　　Third, citizens need to realize that the main cause of those disasters is largely due to climate crisis; therefore, they should purchase energy efficient appliances, plant trees and economize our consumption on housing.

　　From what has been discussed above, I maintain that minimizing the cost of disasters can be achieved by our persisting efforts.

　　【點(diǎn)評(píng)】

　　第一段為總起段，提出問題并引起讀者的注意。在形容自然災(zāi)害時(shí)，用disaster。Devastating表示極具破壞性的，同義詞為destroying。Leave sb. to do sth. 意味著使某人做某事。之后第二段中使用了連接詞accordingly, 用以表示順接或因果關(guān)系，連接詞的使用能夠使文章更具連貫性和邏輯性。而兩個(gè)被動(dòng)語態(tài)的使用則使文章更加客觀公正。

　　第三段從政府的角度來進(jìn)一步論述。Disaster-stricken為形容詞，意思為飽受摧殘的。在講述政府提供的救援時(shí)，文中用了舉例的方法使文章更加具體有說服力。

　　第四段中的be due to主要用來表示不好的原因。Purchase表示大宗購買，意為buy。這里用了三個(gè)并列的動(dòng)賓詞組，使文章更加有說服力。

　　最后一段maintain用來表示某人的觀點(diǎn)，同義詞還有observe, declare, insist。

　　Natural disasters happen almost every day，those devastating ones leave us to think about our behaviors towards nature again.

　　First of all，we need to set a sound pre-warning mechanism, which enables us to detect potential risks at an early stages. Accordingly，emergency measures can be taken，and losses can be minimized.

　　Second，governments have to equipped with an excellent Disaster Assistance Response Team to rescue those disaster-stricken areas. The primary goal is to provide emergency services, such as drinking water and medical treatment, until long-term aid arrives.

　　Third, citizens need to realize that the main cause of those disasters is largely due to climate crisis; therefore, they should purchase energy efficient appliances, plant trees and economize our consumption on housing.

　　From what has been discussed above, I maintain that minimizing the cost of disasters can be achieved by our persisting efforts.

　　【點(diǎn)評(píng)】

　　第一段為總起段，提出問題并引起讀者的注意。在形容自然災(zāi)害時(shí)，用disaster。Devastating表示極具破壞性的，同義詞為destroying。Leave sb. to do sth. 意味著使某人做某事。之后第二段中使用了連接詞accordingly, 用以表示順接或因果關(guān)系，連接詞的使用能夠使文章更具連貫性和邏輯性。而兩個(gè)被動(dòng)語態(tài)的使用則使文章更加客觀公正。

　　第三段從政府的角度來進(jìn)一步論述。Disaster-stricken為形容詞，意思為飽受摧殘的。在講述政府提供的救援時(shí)，文中用了舉例的方法使文章更加具體有說服力。

　　第四段中的be due to主要用來表示不好的原因。Purchase表示大宗購買，意為buy。這里用了三個(gè)并列的動(dòng)賓詞組，使文章更加有說服力。

　　最后一段maintain用來表示某人的觀點(diǎn)，同義詞還有observe, declare, insist。