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　　As is vividly depicted in the picture, two drain pipes are draining much sewage into the river while some chimneys emit poison gas into the sky.Why do our environment get more and more bad? The main reason is there are a lot of factories that emit so much sewage and poison gas that arent purified into our nature directly. Besides, we dont have a few good habits, so you can see littering, spitting and smoking frequently. There are so many people who are using plastic bag.Of course, we need plenty of factories because they will promote the development of our economy. But does it mean that our environment has to be contaminated? Our economy must be development, but it shouldnt be at the expense of the pollution of our environment. We shouldnt be so selfish that we disregard the next generation. We must protect our environment! On the one hand, it isnt until we dispose of sewage and poison gas that we can emit . On the other hand, we must encourage people to give up the bad habit.Lets work together to have a beautiful country!

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　　文章結(jié)構(gòu)清晰，內(nèi)容完整。看著你的作文一天天有所提升，我們?yōu)槟愀械礁吲d，這些都是你努力的結(jié)果。但是，文章中的一些小問題還是值得注意，比如一句話中最好不要出現(xiàn)兩個相同的單詞，遇到這種情況時，可以換一種思路，想想這個句子能不能用其他結(jié)構(gòu)表達，或者該詞能不能用它的近義詞代替等。之前強調(diào)的作者應(yīng)該繼續(xù)堅持。期待你的成功，加油吧!

　　寫作原文

　　As is vividly depicted in the picture, two drain pipes are draining much sewage into the river while some chimneys emit poison gas into the sky.Why do our environment get more and more bad? The main reason is there are a lot of factories that emit so much sewage and poison gas that arent purified into our nature directly. Besides, we dont have a few good habits, so you can see littering, spitting and smoking frequently. There are so many people who are using plastic bag.Of course, we need plenty of factories because they will promote the development of our economy. But does it mean that our environment has to be contaminated? Our economy must be development, but it shouldnt be at the expense of the pollution of our environment. We shouldnt be so selfish that we disregard the next generation. We must protect our environment! On the one hand, it isnt until we dispose of sewage and poison gas that we can emit . On the other hand, we must encourage people to give up the bad habit.Lets work together to have a beautiful country!

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　　文章結(jié)構(gòu)清晰，內(nèi)容完整?？粗愕淖魑囊惶焯煊兴嵘覀?yōu)槟愀械礁吲d，這些都是你努力的結(jié)果。但是，文章中的一些小問題還是值得注意，比如一句話中最好不要出現(xiàn)兩個相同的單詞，遇到這種情況時，可以換一種思路，想想這個句子能不能用其他結(jié)構(gòu)表達，或者該詞能不能用它的近義詞代替等。之前強調(diào)的作者應(yīng)該繼續(xù)堅持。期待你的成功，加油吧!