考研英語待批改作文：

　　0-4分

　　第二篇

　　Dear Sales Manager,

　　I am a senior in the Computer Science Department of Fudan University. I feel bad to trouble you but I am afraid that I have to make a complaint about this book Practical Writing for NETEM bought in your bookstore last week.

　　The reason for my dissatisfaction is to exert amount of the obvious faults in this book. In the fist place, the explanation and analysis about the portion of reading comprehension is shown as uncertain to cause easily some mistakes in my mind. In addition, owing to not follow the standard form in print, the words and sentences can not be clearly identified. Under these circumstances, I find it worse to waste my valuable time and energy

　　I appreciate it very much if you could be returned this book, preferably refund me the money, and I would like to have this matter settled within seven days.

　　Thank you for your consideration and I will be looking forward to your reply.

　　Yours sincerely,

　　Li Ming

　　考研英語作文批改點評如下：

　　Dear Sales Manager,

　　I am a senior in the Computer Science Department of Fudan University. I feel bad to trouble you but I am afraid that I have to make a complaint about this book Practical Writing for NETEM bought in your bookstore last week.

　　The reason for my dissatisfaction is to exert(改為 there are a)amount of the obvious faults in this book. In the fist(拼寫錯誤，改為 first) place, the explanation and analysis about the portion of(刪除 the portion of ) reading comprehension is shown as uncertain to cause easily some mistakes in my mind. In addition, owing to not follow the standard form in print, the words and sentences can not be clearly identified. Under these circumstances, I find it worse to waste my valuable time and energy(這句話沒寫完，后面還要加上to do ).

　　I appreciate it very much if you could be returned this book, preferably refund me the money, and I would like to have this matter settled within seven days.

　　Thank you for your consideration and I will be looking forward to your reply.

　　Yours sincerely,

　　Li Ming

　　3分

　　同學你好，請注意提高英語的表達能力，你的作文中存在表述不清的句子，這在作文中是很嚴重的問題。建議你多背一些滿分作文，積累一些好的句型。

　　考研英語待批改作文：

　　0-4分

　　第二篇

　　Dear Sales Manager,

　　I am a senior in the Computer Science Department of Fudan University. I feel bad to trouble you but I am afraid that I have to make a complaint about this book Practical Writing for NETEM bought in your bookstore last week.

　　The reason for my dissatisfaction is to exert amount of the obvious faults in this book. In the fist place, the explanation and analysis about the portion of reading comprehension is shown as uncertain to cause easily some mistakes in my mind. In addition, owing to not follow the standard form in print, the words and sentences can not be clearly identified. Under these circumstances, I find it worse to waste my valuable time and energy

　　I appreciate it very much if you could be returned this book, preferably refund me the money, and I would like to have this matter settled within seven days.

　　Thank you for your consideration and I will be looking forward to your reply.

　　Yours sincerely,

　　Li Ming

　　考研英語作文批改點評如下：

　　Dear Sales Manager,

　　I am a senior in the Computer Science Department of Fudan University. I feel bad to trouble you but I am afraid that I have to make a complaint about this book Practical Writing for NETEM bought in your bookstore last week.

　　The reason for my dissatisfaction is to exert(改為 there are a)amount of the obvious faults in this book. In the fist(拼寫錯誤，改為 first) place, the explanation and analysis about the portion of(刪除 the portion of ) reading comprehension is shown as uncertain to cause easily some mistakes in my mind. In addition, owing to not follow the standard form in print, the words and sentences can not be clearly identified. Under these circumstances, I find it worse to waste my valuable time and energy(這句話沒寫完，后面還要加上to do ).

　　I appreciate it very much if you could be returned this book, preferably refund me the money, and I would like to have this matter settled within seven days.

　　Thank you for your consideration and I will be looking forward to your reply.

　　Yours sincerely,

　　Li Ming

　　3分

　　同學你好，請注意提高英語的表達能力，你的作文中存在表述不清的句子，這在作文中是很嚴重的問題。建議你多背一些滿分作文，積累一些好的句型。