Yours Sincerely,

　　Li Ming

　　考研英語作文批改點評如下：

　　Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to express my interest in your recent advertised position for a resident in your hospital. 【I appreciate this opportunity of working with you and other colleages(拼寫錯誤). That well(will) be unforgetten(拼寫錯誤)experience in my life.簡單的說一下即可，畢竟人家連你的簡歷都沒有看到還不能決定錄不錄用你】 I am sure that I qualified for the job. Firstly, enclosed with this letter is my resume which further detail(用第三人稱單數details，它的主語是resume) my academic qualifications and previous work experience. I da(去掉)have learned solid theoretical knowledge in Medical Collage(不用大寫，沒有說明是哪個具體的學校) for 5 years and also worked as a(an) intern in Mercy West Hospital for 7 years. During this time, I actually have accumulated many a(去掉，后面的skills用的復數) practical clinical skills which would make me succeed in my future career. Secondly, not only do my qualifications and experience make me a perfece(拼寫錯誤)candidate for it, my cheerful personality is well suited to working as a staff member. At the same time, I am also a teamworker(這不是一個詞)that has been proved in my interns job. Last, I am a very friendly person who can establish rapport quickly with patient of all ages and provide the service which they really need as soon as possible. I would like to meet with you at your earlist(拼寫錯誤)convenience to discuss the possibility of working in your hospital. Thank you for your consideration of my application. I look forward to hearing from you. Yours Sincerely, Li Ming 點評：5-6分太長。其實中間的內容很簡單，1你的學歷;2你的經歷;3你的個人秉性。簡單扼要的說明就可以了。

　　Yours Sincerely,

　　Li Ming

　　考研英語作文批改點評如下：

　　Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to express my interest in your recent advertised position for a resident in your hospital. 【I appreciate this opportunity of working with you and other colleages(拼寫錯誤). That well(will) be unforgetten(拼寫錯誤)experience in my life.簡單的說一下即可，畢竟人家連你的簡歷都沒有看到還不能決定錄不錄用你】 I am sure that I qualified for the job. Firstly, enclosed with this letter is my resume which further detail(用第三人稱單數details，它的主語是resume) my academic qualifications and previous work experience. I da(去掉)have learned solid theoretical knowledge in Medical Collage(不用大寫，沒有說明是哪個具體的學校) for 5 years and also worked as a(an) intern in Mercy West Hospital for 7 years. During this time, I actually have accumulated many a(去掉，后面的skills用的復數) practical clinical skills which would make me succeed in my future career. Secondly, not only do my qualifications and experience make me a perfece(拼寫錯誤)candidate for it, my cheerful personality is well suited to working as a staff member. At the same time, I am also a teamworker(這不是一個詞)that has been proved in my interns job. Last, I am a very friendly person who can establish rapport quickly with patient of all ages and provide the service which they really need as soon as possible. I would like to meet with you at your earlist(拼寫錯誤)convenience to discuss the possibility of working in your hospital. Thank you for your consideration of my application. I look forward to hearing from you. Yours Sincerely, Li Ming 點評：5-6分太長。其實中間的內容很簡單，1你的學歷;2你的經歷;3你的個人秉性。簡單扼要的說明就可以了。