I am a graduate from the Department of Chinese Language and Literature of Beijing University.I am writing this letter to apply for the position of being a staff member which you recently advertised.

　　I am sure that I am qualified for it.First,enclosed with my resume,which futher details my academic qualifications and work experiences.Second,not only do my qualifications and experience make me perfect for the position,my cheerful personality is well candidated to becoming a staff member.Third,my hobbies include sports and music.

　　I would appreciate if you could grant me an interview so that I could explain in more details of the relevance of my educational background and working experience.I am looking forward to hearing from you.

　　Yours sincerely,

　　Li Ming

　　考研英語作文批改點評如下：

　　Dear Sir or Madam,

　　I am a graduate from the Department of Chinese Language and Literature of Beijing University. I am writing this letter to apply for the position of being a staff member which you recently advertised. I am sure that I am qualified for it. 【First, enclosed with my resume, which futher details my academic qualifications and work experiences. 】(這一部分放到本段最后)Second, not only do my qualifications and experience make me perfect for the position, my cheerful personality is well candidated to becoming a staff member. Third, my hobbies include sports and music.(這與求職沒有直接的關系) I would appreciate if you could grant me an interview so that I could explain in more details of the relevance of my educational background and working experience. I am looking forward to hearing from you. Yours sincerely, Li Ming 點評：5分第二段寫的不充分，出去與說明自己無關的話，只有一句話是在推銷自己。

　　I am a graduate from the Department of Chinese Language and Literature of Beijing University.I am writing this letter to apply for the position of being a staff member which you recently advertised.

　　I am sure that I am qualified for it.First,enclosed with my resume,which futher details my academic qualifications and work experiences.Second,not only do my qualifications and experience make me perfect for the position,my cheerful personality is well candidated to becoming a staff member.Third,my hobbies include sports and music.

　　I would appreciate if you could grant me an interview so that I could explain in more details of the relevance of my educational background and working experience.I am looking forward to hearing from you.

　　Yours sincerely,

　　Li Ming

　　考研英語作文批改點評如下：

　　Dear Sir or Madam,

　　I am a graduate from the Department of Chinese Language and Literature of Beijing University. I am writing this letter to apply for the position of being a staff member which you recently advertised. I am sure that I am qualified for it. 【First, enclosed with my resume, which futher details my academic qualifications and work experiences. 】(這一部分放到本段最后)Second, not only do my qualifications and experience make me perfect for the position, my cheerful personality is well candidated to becoming a staff member. Third, my hobbies include sports and music.(這與求職沒有直接的關系) I would appreciate if you could grant me an interview so that I could explain in more details of the relevance of my educational background and working experience. I am looking forward to hearing from you. Yours sincerely, Li Ming 點評：5分第二段寫的不充分，出去與說明自己無關的話，只有一句話是在推銷自己。