實例指導1—畢業晚會

　　【寫作任務】

　　經過高中三年的學習和相處，畢業在即。不論是同學之間還是師生之間都建立了深厚的友誼。按照學校以往的慣例，畢業之前要舉行畢業晚會。現在班主任向大家征集晚會的方案，現在請你以The farewell party 為題，寫一下你心中的畢業晚會。詞數120-150。

　　內容要點：1. 參加者

　　2. 對晚會的設計

　　2） 構句：

　　在表達不同的要點時，應注意句式多變，活用語法，避免單一化。比如，擅用各類復合句、非謂語動詞、倒裝句、介詞結構等來恰當銜接各個簡單句，才能體現較高的英語構句水平。比如：

　　1）As far as I am concerned, we students should play a leading role to make the party unforgettable. 使用了特殊句式As far as I am concerned。

　　The farewell party

　　As far as I am concerned, we students should play a leading role to make the party unforgettable. Because of the lifelong friendship, teachers will be

　　invited as well as our parents who support us so strongly.

　　As you know, how to plan the party is the most important question. At first, our headteacher will make a moving speech for the opening. Then, there will follow the prepared performance, such as songs, dances, cross talks and so on. Besides, party games will be included and teachers, parents and students will take part in them. At last, the party will come to an end by taking photos freely. Last, but not?least, delicious food and drink can’t be left out. As you can see, the farewell party means so much that we will spare no effort to do it well. After all, it should be the highlight of our high school life.

　　實例指導2—校園幫派類

　　【寫作任務】

　　為預防和控制青少年違法犯罪，我國于1999年頒布了、《中華人民共和國預防未成年人犯罪法》，對此問題予以了相當程度的重視。但是由于各種原因，青少年違法犯罪現象仍然大量存在，而且往往與校園幫派有著千絲萬縷的聯系；那么我們該如何看待校園幫派現象呢?針對此問題，請你用英語寫一篇詞數為120-150的英語短文投給《學英語》報社發表自己的看法：

　　參考詞匯：

　　幫派：gang

　　恐嚇、威逼：bully

　　How to View Gangs in Schools?

　　It must be pointed out that gangs made up of several boys or girls, the number of which sometimes even reaches up to several hundred, can be widely seen among middle school students. Not only does a gang have bad effects on students, but also it affects the normal teaching order at school.

　　Most of the gang members are students who are, aggressive and prefer to smoke, drink and play computer games rather than study. Some are willing to join in the gang in order to strengthen the power of their own circles; others just want to get protection from "The Elder Brother"of the gang and still some are forced to do so. Experts suggest that these students be guided correctly in order to avoid them doing harm to society.

　　I think that teenagers should put their time and energy mainly into study. Avoiding joining m any gang means avoiding committing crimes later on

　　【教師點評】

　　這是一篇以議論為主的書面表達，全文共分三段。第一段作為引子提出“校園幫派”存在的現象，

　　用非常肯定的句型：It mustbe pointed out that gangs ．．．can be widely seen among middle school students，；第二段分析“幫派”成員特點和他們加入“幫派”的不同原因，并用一句話. Experts suggest that these students be guided correctly in order to avoid them doing harm to society.得處“幫派”現象的存在是危險的這一結論；第三段對“幫派”是否應該存在這一現象發表自己的看法。

　　整篇文章符合高分書面表達的特性：

　　1、段落完整，層次分明

　　2、語法正確，用詞恰當

　　3、表達個人觀點。具有一定的思想性

　　句型的使用符合以下幾個原則：

　　1、倒裝句原則

　　2、定語從句原則

　　3、并列復合句原則

　　4、虛擬語氣句原則

　　5；高級詞語原則(動名詞作主語和賓語)

　　【佳句欣賞】

　　1） Not only does a gang have bad effects on students, but also it affects the normal teaching order at school. （倒裝句）

　　2) Most of the gang members are students who are, aggressive and prefer to smoke, drink and play computer games rather than study. (定語從句)

　　3）Experts suggest that these students be guided correctly in order to avoid them doing harm to society. （suggest 引導的虛擬語氣的賓語從句）

　　4） Some are willing to join in the gang in order to strengthen the power of their own circles; others just want to get protection from "The Elder Brother"of the gang and still some are forced to do so. （并列復合句）

　　5） Avoiding joining m any gang means avoiding committing crimes later on （動名詞短語作主語和賓語）

　　實例指導3－早戀現象

　　【寫作任務】

　　如今中學生早戀現象在校園黑出現的越來越多。有的人認為應該制止；有的人認為沒有必要干涉，只要不影響正常學習即可。作為中學生，你如何正確看待這個問題?請你寫一篇120--150詞的英語短文來陳述你的觀點或看法。

　　參考詞匯：早戀puppy love

　　3． 在寫作時要住意使用銜接成分使上下文過渡自然，

　　【學生習作】

　　Puppy love is more and more common among middle school ,students nowadays. Concerning this, different people have different opinions.

　　I hold the view that puppy love is unsuitable for us student's because puppy love can lead to many problems. Firstly, it not only influences our spirit but also distracts us from our studies. Then, it also makes our parents and teachers much too worried about us. What's more, puppy love is a

　　waste of time. We are too young to be involved in it.

　　From my point of view, we should concentrate on ourstudies because we are at a stage of gaining knowledge and growth. At this stage, learning more important th,m being involved in love affairs for us middle school students. It is urgent that we should pay more attention to our studies, and only by doing so can we have a brighter future.

　　【教師點評】

　　1. 本篇習作基本完成了寫作任務，并且文章結構合理。第一段直接點題，提出中半生早

　　戀現象越來越多，第二段分三部分敘述了早戀帶來的問題。第三部分闡述自己的觀點：中學生應該把更多的精力放在學習上。

　　2. 從本篇習作看。作者的語言表達能力功底深厚，例如：文章使用了一些高級詞匯，增加

　　了文章的亮點，使文章增色不少．例如：介詞concerning，動詞短語引distract…from…,

　　實例指導4―中學生是否可以穿時尚的服裝

　　寫作任務:

　　假如你是某中學的學生,最近在你們班的英語班會上就"中學生是否可以穿時尚的服裝？"的問題展開了討論。請你根據下表的討論結果,給你校校報"英文寫作"欄目投稿,客觀地介紹討論的情況。(詞數:不少于120)

　　意見

　　60％的同學認為不可以穿時髦的衣服

　　40％的同學認為應該穿時髦的衣服

　　原因 ???1. 價格昂貴，而學生沒有經濟收入；(1). 好看，時尚；(2). 追求時尚會牽扯精力，影響學習；

　　2. 作為當代的年輕人不應該太保守，應適應時代的發展；

　　3. 學生應該穿著樸素，時髦的服飾不符合中學生身份。

　　4. “愛美之心人皆有之”，追求美是中學生的權力。

　　初稿:

　　One day we had a discussion about whether students should wear fashionable clothes. 60% of the students are against the idea. They said, "Fashionable clothes are too expensive and we haven’t made money yet. We teenagers should put our hearts into study. Going after the fashion will waste our time and it will have a bad effect on our study. We should be dressed in a simple way, and fashionable clothes don’t fit in with the environment at school." ???? 40% of the students said, "We can wear fashionable clothes, because they are good-looking and popular. As a young student in China, one should follow the fashion of the modern life." They also think that they have right to enjoy their beauty.教師點評: ????本篇作文條理清晰,明確表達了兩種觀點及其原因。但也有不足之處:

　　1. 作者只是將寫作任務中的表格提示做了字面上翻譯,語言略顯生硬。

　　1. 作者將要點整合,準確地表達了復雜的邏輯關系,條理清晰,使文章渾然一體。2. 在文章中使用了一些恰到好處的復雜句式,句型富于變化,主動被動交替使用,例如:60% of the students, who are against wearing fashionable clothes, said ... / We are expected to dress simply ... 表現出作者很好的語言功底。

　　?實例指導5----Ought to read too many fantasy stories for teenagers?

　　【寫作任務】

　　隨著科技和社會的發展，人們的想象力越來越豐富，隨之而來的便是越來越多的科幻小說問世。科幻小說以其緊張、新奇、刺激的情節極大地吸引著人們的眼球，尤其是青少年和在校的中小學生，有的同學看科幻小說著了迷，甚至耽誤了學習，荒廢了學業。不過，有的同學也不以為然。請以Ought to read too many fantasy stories for teenagers?為題，寫一篇120詞左右的文章發表你的看法。注意行文連貫流暢，內容充實完整

　　看法 理由

　　不要多看，影響學業 1. 花費太多時間與精力，不利于集中精力學習；

　　2. 會依賴空想而不去追求現實生活；

　　3. 有些科幻小說寫得太粗俗，影響身心健康。

　　應該多看， 豐富想象力 科幻能引導科學的發展方向；

　　開闊孩子的視野，發展孩子的想象力和創造力；

　　能夠根據現在的情形有效地推斷出未來可能發生的情況。

　　你的觀點 自由發揮

　　參考詞匯：1. vulgar 粗俗；2. creativity 創造力

　　1. nowadays

　　2. as a result

　　3. put out

　　4. considering

　　5. aim

　　6. in one’s opinion

　　7. too many

　　8. absorb

　　9. as a consequence

　　10. lead to

　　11. mental health

　　12. scores of

　　13. base on

　　14. broaden

　　15. in terms of

　　16. as for

　　17. as well

　　18. personally

　　19. focus on

　　【組詞成句】

　　根據構思和文章大意使用上述詞匯和正確的句型將各要點表達出來，注意謂語動詞的適當變化形式，以增加語言的表達力；還可以使用不同的句型結構特別是高級句型，如簡單句、并列句、復合句（賓語從句、非限制性定于從句）等；另外，也可以使用一些比較復雜的語法現象，如介詞短語（做后置定語、方式狀語）、不定式（做賓語）、動名詞（做主語、賓語）等，使文章更加出彩。

　　1. People develop their imagination quickly.

　　2. More and more fantasy stories have been put out.

　　3. Teenagers can’t read too many fantasy stories as they like.

　　4. Reading fantasy stories takes many students a great deal of time and energy.

　　5. Some teenagers are too ridiculous that they are completely absorbed in fantasy stories.

　　6. Scores of students think it right for teenagers to read fantasy stories.

　　7. They think that such stories are based on science fiction.

　　8. Reading them increases our knowledge and broadens our mind

　　9. It also gives us some new ways to look at old situations and makes us look at the world in terms of centuries, not just six months or five years.

　　10. Important as study is, it is not the only thing we can do.

　　【參考范文】

　　Ought to read too many fantasy stories for teenagers?

　　Nowadays, with the development of the technology and society, people develop their imagination quickly. As a result, more and more fantasy stories have been put out. Is it right for the middle school students to read as many fantasy stories as possible?

　　Considering the main aim for a student, some students don’t think so. In their opinion, teenagers can’t read too many fantasy stories as they like. It's reported that reading fantasy stories takes many students a great deal of time and energy. What’s more, some teenagers are too ridiculous that they are completely absorbed in fantasy stories, as a consequence they ignore their studies. Even worse, some fantasy stories are too vulgar, which can be harmful for the teenagers’ mental health.

　　However, scores of students think it right for teenagers to read more fantasy stories. They think that such stories are based on the science fiction, which can lead the direction of science. Reading them still increases their knowledge and broadens their mind. It also gives them some new ways to look at old situations and makes them look at the world in terms of centuries, not just six months or five years.

　　Personally, although it is a good way for teenagers to develop our imagination and creativity, as middle school students, we must first focus on studies and put more effort into our schoolwork.

　　【佳句背誦】

　　1. As middle school students, learning more knowledge is our first aim.

　　2. To read many fantasy stories will surely have much influence on their studies.

　　3. It’s said that the some young girls are absorbed in fantasy stories, thus they ignore their studies.

　　4. As middle school students, they should concentrate on their studies at present.

　　5. Reading fantasy stories can enrich our knowledge and broaden our mind.

　　6. Although it is a good way for teenagers to develop their imagination and creativity, as middle school students, they must first focus on studies and put more effort into their schoolwork.

　　實例指導6—選擇高考志愿

　　[真題展示]

　　下表是你根據平時了解所得到的中國高三學生選擇高考志愿的信息。請你根據該表用英語寫一篇150詞左右的簡要介紹，向編輯部反映該情況。

　　約35%的同學認為： 約45%的同學認為： 約20%的同學認為：

　　1.應以個人興趣為主。

　　2.興趣是成功之母。

　　3.被迫學自己不感興趣的專業是痛苦的。 1.應以社會需要為主。

　　2.將來容易找到工作。

　　3.興趣可以培養和改變。 1.如何選擇，是一難題。

　　2.聽從父母或老師的意見。

　　第二步

　　圍繞主題，提煉要點，編擬提綱

　　1．全文主題句：①中國高三學生對選擇高考志愿持不同觀點。

　　2. 段落主題句：②約35%的同學認為選擇志愿應以個人興趣為主。下述展開句為：③興趣是成功之母；④被迫學自己不感興趣的專業是痛苦的。（展開句與主題句是因果關系）

　　3. 段落主題句：⑤約45%的同學認為選擇高考志愿.應以社會需要為主。下述展開句為：⑥選擇好的志愿將來容易找到工作；⑦興趣可以培養和改變。（展開句與主題句是因果關系）

　　4. 段落主題句：⑧約20%的同學認為如何選擇高考志愿是一難題。下述展開句為：⑨選擇高考志愿時應聽從父母或老師的意見。

　　第三步 分析要點及提綱，提煉關鍵單詞和短語。

　　要點序號 關鍵單詞和短語

　　① high school graduates, different opinions, choose their courses and universities.

　　② About 35%, the choice, base on, their own interest.

　　③ Interest, the mother of success.

　　④ Miserable, study, have no interest in.