見官死開頭之一：廢話連篇不知所云

　　典型失敗案例： Topic 1-Should college students be allowed to get married?

　　This topic is very interesting. Im very interested in talking about this topic. Because Im also a college student and Im not married

　　修改方案：開門見山 直奔主題

　　In my opinion, it would not be a wise decision to allow college students to get married.

　　Topic 2-Will modern technology, such as the Internet, ever replace the book or the writing word as the sole source of information?

　　Ok, this topic is a very good topic. First, let me tell you a story: I have a friend, he likes go on the internet very much. Every day, he uses internet to read news or play internet games. So we can see the internet is more and more important in our daily life.

　　Topic 3-The importance of environmental protection

　　Oh, this topic is surely very important. Isnt it? Of course! Its really very very important!

　　見官死開頭之二：中式英文 人見人暈

　　典型失敗案例：Topic 1-The happiest moment in your life

　　In our life, there are always some moments which make your heart flower opened angrily

　　Topic 2- The population problem

　　The population problem is a very big problem. For example, in the city centers of Shanghai, we can always see people mountain people sea there.

　　Topic3- Is there fairness in todays business world?

　　I think in todays society, there is no fairness in the business world. For example, I always chopped when I go out buy things

　　Topic 4- The advantage of being a nice person

　　Being a nice person have many advantage. I believe if a people always do bad things, he will get baoying.

　　見官死開頭之三：觀點模糊 態度曖昧

　　典型失敗案例： Topic-Should college students be allowed to get married?

　　I think this topic is very hard to say. Because I am still very little, only 17, and not married, so this topic is very difficult for me

　　見官死開頭之四：偏離主題 無軌電車

　　典型失敗案例：Topic-It is said that nowadays one can not acquire the qualifications and quality essential to success through university education. To what extent do you agree or disagree with the statement?

　　I think to success, we must have a lot of important qualities. To have these important qualities, we must learn a lot of things, for example, English, music tools, and etc. We can learn these qualities from our teachers, our friends and from books. All in all, we can learn from many places.

　　見官死開頭之五：語法錯誤 慘不忍睹

　　典型失敗案例：Topic-If children behave badly, should their parents accept responsibility and also be punished?

　　About this problem, my think is if children behave badly, then parents are not right. Because teach child is parents responsibility. So we also punish parents too besides children is also should.

　　見官死開頭之六：過分簡單 沒有重點

　　典型失敗案例：Topic-The importance of environmental protection

　　This issue is surely very important, lets talk about it!

　　見官死開頭之七：用詞不當 表達不準

　　典型失敗案例：Topic-Should college students be allowed to get married?

　　I think college students should not be allowed to get married because they are very young and so we cant take the responsibility to form a family.

　　見官死開頭之八：意思重復 原地踏步

　　典型失敗案例：Topic-Your opinion on DINK families

　　My opinion on DINK families is that DINK families is not a good thing. And it is a bad thing. It brings no benefits to our society and it is even sometimes harmful to our society.

　　見官死開頭之九：中國俗語 胡亂翻譯

　　典型失敗案例：Topic 1-Is it good to have a large family?

　　I think it is good to have a large family. Because we Chinese believe a sentence: Many sons, many lucks

　　正確說法：Happiness lies in having many children

　　Topic 2 -Should we pretend to know everything or admit our ignorance?

　　We all know, our Chinese old fathers and grandfathers said: Know is know, dont know is dont know

　　Topic 3- Do you think ones character is greatly influenced by his/her family?

　　Chinese old words says very good: Dragon born dragon, phoenix born phoenix, rats son can make hole

　　Topic 4- The advantage of being a nice person

　　I believe one sentence:A good person is all life safe. We Chinese people always say: Good has good pay, bad has bad pay.

　　見官死開頭之十： 觀點武斷 態度強硬

　　典型失敗案例：Topic1-The importance of confidence

　　In my opinion, confidence is the most important thing for a person. All the successful people in the world are full of confidence. While those people who dont have confidence, they all have failed.

　　Topic 2 - The solution to the traffic problem

　　I think to solve the traffic problem, very easy! For those who dont obey the traffic rules, we should put all of them into prison. If we do that, Im sure there will be no traffic problem any more.

　　見官死開頭之一：廢話連篇不知所云

　　典型失敗案例： Topic 1-Should college students be allowed to get married?

　　This topic is very interesting. Im very interested in talking about this topic. Because Im also a college student and Im not married

　　修改方案：開門見山 直奔主題

　　In my opinion, it would not be a wise decision to allow college students to get married.

　　Topic 2-Will modern technology, such as the Internet, ever replace the book or the writing word as the sole source of information?

　　Ok, this topic is a very good topic. First, let me tell you a story: I have a friend, he likes go on the internet very much. Every day, he uses internet to read news or play internet games. So we can see the internet is more and more important in our daily life.

　　Topic 3-The importance of environmental protection

　　Oh, this topic is surely very important. Isnt it? Of course! Its really very very important!

　　見官死開頭之二：中式英文 人見人暈

　　典型失敗案例：Topic 1-The happiest moment in your life

　　In our life, there are always some moments which make your heart flower opened angrily

　　Topic 2- The population problem

　　The population problem is a very big problem. For example, in the city centers of Shanghai, we can always see people mountain people sea there.

　　Topic3- Is there fairness in todays business world?

　　I think in todays society, there is no fairness in the business world. For example, I always chopped when I go out buy things

　　Topic 4- The advantage of being a nice person

　　Being a nice person have many advantage. I believe if a people always do bad things, he will get baoying.

　　見官死開頭之三：觀點模糊 態度曖昧

　　典型失敗案例： Topic-Should college students be allowed to get married?

　　I think this topic is very hard to say. Because I am still very little, only 17, and not married, so this topic is very difficult for me

　　見官死開頭之四：偏離主題 無軌電車

　　典型失敗案例：Topic-It is said that nowadays one can not acquire the qualifications and quality essential to success through university education. To what extent do you agree or disagree with the statement?

　　I think to success, we must have a lot of important qualities. To have these important qualities, we must learn a lot of things, for example, English, music tools, and etc. We can learn these qualities from our teachers, our friends and from books. All in all, we can learn from many places.

　　見官死開頭之五：語法錯誤 慘不忍睹

　　典型失敗案例：Topic-If children behave badly, should their parents accept responsibility and also be punished?

　　About this problem, my think is if children behave badly, then parents are not right. Because teach child is parents responsibility. So we also punish parents too besides children is also should.

　　見官死開頭之六：過分簡單 沒有重點

　　典型失敗案例：Topic-The importance of environmental protection

　　This issue is surely very important, lets talk about it!

　　見官死開頭之七：用詞不當 表達不準

　　典型失敗案例：Topic-Should college students be allowed to get married?

　　I think college students should not be allowed to get married because they are very young and so we cant take the responsibility to form a family.

　　見官死開頭之八：意思重復 原地踏步

　　典型失敗案例：Topic-Your opinion on DINK families

　　My opinion on DINK families is that DINK families is not a good thing. And it is a bad thing. It brings no benefits to our society and it is even sometimes harmful to our society.

　　見官死開頭之九：中國俗語 胡亂翻譯

　　典型失敗案例：Topic 1-Is it good to have a large family?

　　I think it is good to have a large family. Because we Chinese believe a sentence: Many sons, many lucks

　　正確說法：Happiness lies in having many children

　　Topic 2 -Should we pretend to know everything or admit our ignorance?

　　We all know, our Chinese old fathers and grandfathers said: Know is know, dont know is dont know

　　Topic 3- Do you think ones character is greatly influenced by his/her family?

　　Chinese old words says very good: Dragon born dragon, phoenix born phoenix, rats son can make hole

　　Topic 4- The advantage of being a nice person

　　I believe one sentence:A good person is all life safe. We Chinese people always say: Good has good pay, bad has bad pay.

　　見官死開頭之十： 觀點武斷 態度強硬

　　典型失敗案例：Topic1-The importance of confidence

　　In my opinion, confidence is the most important thing for a person. All the successful people in the world are full of confidence. While those people who dont have confidence, they all have failed.

　　Topic 2 - The solution to the traffic problem

　　I think to solve the traffic problem, very easy! For those who dont obey the traffic rules, we should put all of them into prison. If we do that, Im sure there will be no traffic problem any more.