高考英語的滿分作文
將下列對話以第三人稱改寫成一篇110左右單詞的短文.
Dialogue
The year is 1963 in the USA.Two men are talking in prison.
A:Why are you in here
B:I was on the march.
A:What march
B:Havent you heard There was a big civil rights march through the center of Birmingham yesterday.
A:Why was that
B:I imagine youre not very interested in politics.
A:Im a stranger here.Im from the west coast.Tell me more.
B:Its like this.We black people of Birmingham want equal rights.We want the same rights as the white people in the city.For years weve been demanding better housing and jobs.
A:So youre telling me that the situation here is bad for black people.
B:Thats right.Were not treated as equal citizens.We cant go to the public parks or swimming pools.Its forbidden.
A:What happened on the march then
B:I joined in the march and we were marching peacefully along and then the police came up.
They told us to go home but we went on.They said that the march had been forbidden,but that wasnt true.They hit us with their sticks over and over again and put some of us in prison.
A:I imagine that hurt a lot.
B:Yes,my whole body hurts.
【參考答案】The story took place in 1963,when the black people were not treated as equally as the white people in the USA.They were not permitted to go to the public parks or swimming pools.Besides,their housing was in poor conditions and they did very heavy work.To demand the same rights as the whites,black people of Birmingham marched along the street peacefully.But the police wanted to stop them by hitting them with their sticks over and over again.The black people did not give up even though some of them were put into prison.They decided to go on strike until they won the fight against racial discrimination.
【解題導引】本對話反映了20世紀50年代后期到60年代美國黑人為爭取和維護平等的公民權而舉行大規模民權示威游行,興起了少數民族爭取民主權利的群眾運動以及遭到美國當局鎮壓的情況,揭示了美國種族隔離,種族歧視的黑暗現象.短文需通過一些事例來揭示這一主題:
1)黑人不公平的遭遇:
①Were not treated as equal citizens.
②We cant go to the public parks or swimming pools.
2)黑人反抗行為:
①We want the same rights as the white people in Birmingham.
②We demand better housing and jobs.
③We join in the march and march peacefully.
3)美國當局鎮壓黑人的行徑:
①The police come up and tell us to go home.
②They want to forbid the march.
③They hit us with their sticks over and over again.
④They put some of us in prison.
在改寫成短文過程中,除了在內容要點上要覆蓋上述幾點,還必須注意幾個問題:
1)人稱改用第三人稱;
2)時態應用過去時;
3)連接自然,行文流暢.
將下列對話以第三人稱改寫成一篇110左右單詞的短文.
Dialogue
The year is 1963 in the USA.Two men are talking in prison.
A:Why are you in here
B:I was on the march.
A:What march
B:Havent you heard There was a big civil rights march through the center of Birmingham yesterday.
A:Why was that
B:I imagine youre not very interested in politics.
A:Im a stranger here.Im from the west coast.Tell me more.
B:Its like this.We black people of Birmingham want equal rights.We want the same rights as the white people in the city.For years weve been demanding better housing and jobs.
A:So youre telling me that the situation here is bad for black people.
B:Thats right.Were not treated as equal citizens.We cant go to the public parks or swimming pools.Its forbidden.
A:What happened on the march then
B:I joined in the march and we were marching peacefully along and then the police came up.
They told us to go home but we went on.They said that the march had been forbidden,but that wasnt true.They hit us with their sticks over and over again and put some of us in prison.
A:I imagine that hurt a lot.
B:Yes,my whole body hurts.
【參考答案】The story took place in 1963,when the black people were not treated as equally as the white people in the USA.They were not permitted to go to the public parks or swimming pools.Besides,their housing was in poor conditions and they did very heavy work.To demand the same rights as the whites,black people of Birmingham marched along the street peacefully.But the police wanted to stop them by hitting them with their sticks over and over again.The black people did not give up even though some of them were put into prison.They decided to go on strike until they won the fight against racial discrimination.
【解題導引】本對話反映了20世紀50年代后期到60年代美國黑人為爭取和維護平等的公民權而舉行大規模民權示威游行,興起了少數民族爭取民主權利的群眾運動以及遭到美國當局鎮壓的情況,揭示了美國種族隔離,種族歧視的黑暗現象.短文需通過一些事例來揭示這一主題:
1)黑人不公平的遭遇:
①Were not treated as equal citizens.
②We cant go to the public parks or swimming pools.
2)黑人反抗行為:
①We want the same rights as the white people in Birmingham.
②We demand better housing and jobs.
③We join in the march and march peacefully.
3)美國當局鎮壓黑人的行徑:
①The police come up and tell us to go home.
②They want to forbid the march.
③They hit us with their sticks over and over again.
④They put some of us in prison.
在改寫成短文過程中,除了在內容要點上要覆蓋上述幾點,還必須注意幾個問題:
1)人稱改用第三人稱;
2)時態應用過去時;
3)連接自然,行文流暢.
