習作評析（5）

　　　　假若一個新西蘭教育參觀團要到你校訪問 ， 他們想了解中國教育的基本情況，請根據以下圖表和所給提示，用英語寫一篇 120 字左右的短文，為來客介紹當今中國教育的基本情況。

　　　　1. 提示詞：（ 1 ） compulsory education －義務教育；（ 2 ） junior middle school －初中；（ 3 ） senior middle school －高中；（ 4 ） professional school －職業學校。

　　　　2. 短文須包括以下要點：

　　　　在高校，部分費用由家庭承擔；中國教育盡管成績巨大，但需要改革。

　　　　學生原文

　　Education System in China Today

　　　　Education in China today has been developing rapidly. In many provinces， it is compulsory and free. Most children are started school by the age of six. They spend five or six years in primary school and three years of junior middle school， which are compulsory education.

　　　　After that， some can attend professional school for two to three years before work. Some will attend senior middle school for three years. Students have to pass by a series of examination before enter a college or university. The college or university life lasts two to four years. Now part of the costs are provided with their families， although students can get the support from the college. After they graduate， they can go and find jobs.

　　　　Though China have taken place great changes in the fields of education， there are a great deal to be improved.

　　　　名師點評：

　　　　這是一篇說明文，考生能夠根據圖表的順序和所給提示，比較條理地敘述中國的教育基本情況，內容要點齊全，能靈活運用所學詞匯，語言較為生動，如：現在完成進行時的運用，非限定性定語從句的運用等。

　　　　文中個別地方內容重復，如：第二句（ In many provinces， it is compulsory and free. ）多余，且不知所云，文中最后一句出現了漢語式的英語。個別句子產生主謂不一致的錯誤，有的地方介詞搭配欠佳，現分別分析如下：

　　　　（ 1 ）第二句多余。

　　　　（ 2 ） are started 改為 start .

　　　　（ 3 ） of 改為 in ，因為 spend 與 in 搭配。

　　　　（ 4 ）去掉 will ，全文用一般現在時介紹中國的教育情況。

　　　　（ 5 ） pass by 改為 pass . pass by 意為經過、路過， pass 在此意為通過、（考試）過關

　　　　（ 6 ） enter 改為 entering . before 如果作介詞用，后接動詞的 -ing 形式，如果作連詞用，后接從句，應該改為 they enters .

　　　　（ 7 ） costs are 改為 cost is .做費用解，是不可數名詞后接動詞的單數形式。

　　　　（ 8 ） provided with 改為 provided by .

　　　　（ 9 ）最后一句 Though China has taken great changes ， there are a great deal 考生受漢語思維的影響，應該改為 Though great changes have taken place in China ， there is much 。

　　　　精品范文：

　　Education System in China Today

　　　　Education in China today has been developing rapidly. Most children start school by the age of six. They spend five or six years in primary school and three years in junior middle school， which are compulsory education.

　　　　After that， some can attend professional school for two to three years before work. Some attend senior middle school for three years. Students have to pass a series of examinations before entering a college or university. The college or university life lasts two to four years. Now part of the cost is provided by with their families， although students can get the support from the college. After they graduate， they can go and find jobs.

　　　　Though great changes have taken place in the fields of education in China， there is still much to be improved.

　　習作評析（5）

　　　　假若一個新西蘭教育參觀團要到你校訪問 ， 他們想了解中國教育的基本情況，請根據以下圖表和所給提示，用英語寫一篇 120 字左右的短文，為來客介紹當今中國教育的基本情況。

　　　　1. 提示詞：（ 1 ） compulsory education －義務教育；（ 2 ） junior middle school －初中；（ 3 ） senior middle school －高中；（ 4 ） professional school －職業學校。

　　　　2. 短文須包括以下要點：

　　　　在高校，部分費用由家庭承擔；中國教育盡管成績巨大，但需要改革。

　　　　學生原文

　　Education System in China Today

　　　　Education in China today has been developing rapidly. In many provinces， it is compulsory and free. Most children are started school by the age of six. They spend five or six years in primary school and three years of junior middle school， which are compulsory education.

　　　　After that， some can attend professional school for two to three years before work. Some will attend senior middle school for three years. Students have to pass by a series of examination before enter a college or university. The college or university life lasts two to four years. Now part of the costs are provided with their families， although students can get the support from the college. After they graduate， they can go and find jobs.

　　　　Though China have taken place great changes in the fields of education， there are a great deal to be improved.

　　　　名師點評：

　　　　這是一篇說明文，考生能夠根據圖表的順序和所給提示，比較條理地敘述中國的教育基本情況，內容要點齊全，能靈活運用所學詞匯，語言較為生動，如：現在完成進行時的運用，非限定性定語從句的運用等。

　　　　文中個別地方內容重復，如：第二句（ In many provinces， it is compulsory and free. ）多余，且不知所云，文中最后一句出現了漢語式的英語。個別句子產生主謂不一致的錯誤，有的地方介詞搭配欠佳，現分別分析如下：

　　　　（ 1 ）第二句多余。

　　　　（ 2 ） are started 改為 start .

　　　　（ 3 ） of 改為 in ，因為 spend 與 in 搭配。

　　　　（ 4 ）去掉 will ，全文用一般現在時介紹中國的教育情況。

　　　　（ 5 ） pass by 改為 pass . pass by 意為經過、路過， pass 在此意為通過、（考試）過關

　　　　（ 6 ） enter 改為 entering . before 如果作介詞用，后接動詞的 -ing 形式，如果作連詞用，后接從句，應該改為 they enters .

　　　　（ 7 ） costs are 改為 cost is .做費用解，是不可數名詞后接動詞的單數形式。

　　　　（ 8 ） provided with 改為 provided by .

　　　　（ 9 ）最后一句 Though China has taken great changes ， there are a great deal 考生受漢語思維的影響，應該改為 Though great changes have taken place in China ， there is much 。

　　　　精品范文：

　　Education System in China Today

　　　　Education in China today has been developing rapidly. Most children start school by the age of six. They spend five or six years in primary school and three years in junior middle school， which are compulsory education.

　　　　After that， some can attend professional school for two to three years before work. Some attend senior middle school for three years. Students have to pass a series of examinations before entering a college or university. The college or university life lasts two to four years. Now part of the cost is provided by with their families， although students can get the support from the college. After they graduate， they can go and find jobs.

　　　　Though great changes have taken place in the fields of education in China， there is still much to be improved.