Yours sincerly,

　　Li Ming

　　考研英語作文批改點評如下：

　　Dear Sir or Madam, I am a(應該用an) undergraduate with Department of Human Resources in ABC University. I am writing to apply for the HR assistant position which issued on your homepage. I hope that my major and experiences will qualify me for the job. Firstly, for the past four years I have acheived(拼寫錯誤，achieved) satisfactory scores in my studies and been awarded scholarships several times, and I also had past the Human(既然后面的單詞都沒有大寫首字母，這里也不要大寫了) resources management division examination. Secondly, with more than one year of experience working as a part-time HR assistant in D company, I feel that I have the qualifications necessary to effectively handle the responsibilities of the position. Lastly, compared to other candidates(不要跟別人比較，因為你不了解別的應聘者的情況) I can speak not only English but also Japanese fluently.

　　I would like to express my gratitude for your attention to my resume. I look forward to hearing from you soon.

　　Yourssincerely(Yours sincerely),

　　Li(不用空格) Ming 點評：7-8分寫的不錯，有些地方最好能簡化一點。